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Write an email to the manager of the moving company in about 150–200 words. Your email should: Explain why you chose the moving company and what services were promised. Describe the problems you experienced and how they affected you. Explain what you would like the company to do to resolve the situation.

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Introduction
Dear Manager,
Body paragraph 1
I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the service provided by your company.
To begin
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 with, I was very impressed by the reviews , and those reviews convinced me to choose your moving service. Your staff assured me that the work would be completed within the agreed timeframe and that the household appliances would be packed securely.
Body paragraph 2
Although
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 your staff arrived on time, they were unable to load my belongings into the truck on time.
Consequently
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, I vacated my current house later than the agreed-upon time. I had to pay an additional $500 to my landlord because of the delay. The staff did not pack the appliances securely;
as a result
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, my fridge and washing machine were damaged.
Body paragraph 3
I would really appreciate it if you could reimburse me for the cost of $350 that I spent to repair the damaged appliances and the additional $500 that I paid to the landlord. I hope that your company will take the necessary measures so that your future customers will not experience similar issues.
Body paragraph 4
Thank you so much for considering my request, and I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Body paragraph 5
Sincerely,
Conclusion
Chaitanya Kacharla

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Task response
You answer all parts of the task. To make the email even stronger, add a little more detail about the move, such as the moving date, the new home, or when you found the damage. This would make your request easier for the manager to check.
Task response
Your request for money is clear. You could also give the company a time to reply, for example: “Please reply within seven days.” This makes the ending more direct and useful.
Coherence and cohesion
The email has a clear order: why you chose the firm, what went wrong, how it hurt you, and what you want. Each paragraph has one main job, so it is easy to follow.
Coherence and cohesion
You use linking words well, such as “Although”, “Consequently”, and “as a result”. You can make the second paragraph flow even better by joining the two problems with a short link, such as “In addition, there was another serious problem.”
Coherence and cohesion
The opening and closing fit a formal email. For a more firm tone, you may change “I would really appreciate it if” to “I would like you to”. This is still polite but more clear.
Task response
You clearly explain why you chose the company: good reviews and the staff’s promises about time and safe packing.
Task response
You give clear, real details about the harm: a late move, extra money paid to the landlord, and damage to the fridge and washing machine.
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Your request is exact and easy to understand because you state both costs and ask for the company to act.
Coherence and cohesion
The four short paragraphs are in a good order and make the email easy to read.
Coherence and cohesion
Words like “Consequently” and “as a result” clearly show how the company’s actions led to your problems.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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