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The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 'ELTS 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 'ELTS 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the percentage of the poplulation of the
computer
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ownership
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 by education level from 2002 to 2010, and analyses it with five main categories.
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it is clear that
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 the rate of
computer
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ownership
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 increased steadily over time. Meanwhile, the number of
computer
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 owners rises with the degree level. In 2002, the percentage of
computer
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ownership
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 had its lowest point, with about 58%, where the percentage of users rose to around 78% in 2010, which was the highest point in the period.
According to
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 the graph, in 2002, those who had no high school diploma had the lowest proportion, with around 15%,
while
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 those with postgraduate qualifications had approximately 80%. In 2010, all the
computer
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 users experienced a considerable rise relatively. The lowest group doubled compared to before, which plateaued at around 42%, and the highest group increased significantly to nearly 92%.
To conclude
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, the amount of
computer
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ownership
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 increased in popularity with the education level.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, ownership with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rises" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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