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Education is not a luxury, but a basic human right and as such should be free for everyone irrespective of personal wealth. Do you agree or disagree?

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State your answer clearly in the first part: say if you agree or disagree. Keep this same view in all parts of the essay.
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Explain your main ideas in a clear way. For example, say why free education helps poor families, and why money may still be needed for books, travel, or extra classes.
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Use real and simple examples. You could write about a poor student who can go to school when fees are free, or a family that cannot pay for college.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear four-part plan: introduction, first main idea, second main idea, and conclusion. Each main part should have one clear point.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence connect to the one before it. Some ideas in the essay are hard to follow, such as the link between free education and poor students not wanting to finish study.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words correctly, such as 'First', 'Also', 'However', 'For example', and 'In conclusion'. Do not join too many different ideas in one sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Make the conclusion match your main view. At present, it says free education is like gambling, but the earlier part does not fully explain this idea.
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You talk about both free education and the role of money in education. This shows you understand the main subject.
coherence and cohesion
You use a conclusion and try to give reasons for your view, such as good teachers and practical tests.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental right
  • accessible
  • social mobility
  • personal and professional development
  • overall development
  • equality
  • social disparities
  • access
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