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The bar chart below shows the number of students who studied three different subjects in 2001, 2002 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart below shows the number of students who studied three different subjects in 2001, 2002 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the number of students who studied three different subjects over the period 2001,2002,and 2003.
This
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 report aims to summarise the key trends,significant comparisons and notable changes highlighted in the data.
Overall
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,it is evident that
the female
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females
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 in social sciences experienced a marked increase,with the highest value represented in
female
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females
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 in social sciences
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while
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the male
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males
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 in languages
represents
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 the smallest.Another notable trend is the
female
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number of females
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 and
male
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males
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 in
humanities
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,which
has
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have
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 almost identical numbers over the period.
Initially
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,the female in social
scienced
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sciences
 accounted for 24.000,making it the highest among all categories.
This
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 is followed by the male in sciences,which represents approximately 22%,significantly lower than the largest category.
In contrast
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,the contribution of
male
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males
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 in languages is relatively insignificant ,with a number of only 3%.
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,a noticeable trend is the uniformity between male
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and
 female ,which both show similar growth
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patterns
 over the period.
To sum up
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,the data highlighted the number of students who studied three different subjects ,the most significant feature standing out.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart, illustrates, number of students, academic years
  • Trends, increased, decreased, remained stable
  • Popularity, more students, consistently, annually
  • Highest figure, lowest figure, peaked at, hit a low of
  • Reasons for trends, job market demand, curriculum changes
  • Summarize, key points, shifts in preferences, data overview
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