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The bar chart below shows the number of students who studied three different subjects in 2001, 2002 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart below shows the number of students who studied three different subjects in 2001, 2002 and 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides information about the number of male and female learners who chose between 8 different university
subjects
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 during 2005.
Overall
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, whilst these
subjects
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 exhibited different patterns across both genders, some,
such
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 as social sciences and sciences, registered the highest share,
whereas
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 others, like languages and arts , were considered the lowest
subjects
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. As the 1chart illustrates, the majority of female students preferred social sciences at 24,000 compared with 14,000 of males.
In contrast
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, most male learners chose science, recorded at around 23,000 compared to 13,000 from females. Mathematical
subjects
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 are
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 obviously preferred by men , and only roughly 4,000 women chose them.
On the other hand
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, Languages registered the lowest number of males, which was nearly 2,000 , compared with a far difference from women by more than 15,000. The male individuals
also
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 represent the minority in the arts courses at approximately 3,000,
while
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 the female segment was around 8,000. Meanwhile, the remaining courses showed moderate shares, ranging between 6,000 and 16,000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words subjects with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart, illustrates, number of students, academic years
  • Trends, increased, decreased, remained stable
  • Popularity, more students, consistently, annually
  • Highest figure, lowest figure, peaked at, hit a low of
  • Reasons for trends, job market demand, curriculum changes
  • Summarize, key points, shifts in preferences, data overview
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