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You have been invited to attend an interview for a place studying a course in a college. Unfortunately, because of a previous appointment, you cannot come at the time they wish. Write a letter to the admissions tutor: explain your position apologise and offer to come on another day or later the same day. ask how long the interview will be and whether there will be any tests during it.

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Dear
sir
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Sir
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/Madam My name is Nancy. I would like to inform you that currently I am
student
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a student
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. I am writing
this
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 letter regarding the
interview
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 which was conducted early
and
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, and
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 I got the appointment
time
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but
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, but
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 unfortunately I could not make that
interview
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on
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at
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 the
time
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 that you
will
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are
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 available. The reason is
I
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that
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 a week
ago
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ago,
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 my family doctor conducted
a
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an
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 appointment for my health check. I was not aware
about
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of
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this
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 appointment before I got
reminder
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a reminder
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 about it yesterday. I
apologize
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apologise
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 that I could not make
this
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interview
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 on
exact
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the exact
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 date and
time
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 that you
were given
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gave
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 me. Could you please provide me
another
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with another
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 day and
time
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 if possible
.
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?
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This
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time
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 I will be there for my
interview
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. I will be grateful if you could
conducted
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conduct
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 it on
other
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another
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 day.
Furthermore
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, I would like to ask how long it will take? And could you please
informed
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inform me
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 about the process of the
interview
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like
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, like
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 any test will be conducted
so
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, so
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 that I can prepare
my
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for my
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interview
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 properly. I would wait
about hearing
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to hear
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 from you Your sincerely Nancy

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task response
Explain the problem more clearly. Say the date and time of the doctor visit, and say that it was fixed before the interview.
task response
Ask for a new time in a clear way. You can offer a later time on the same day as well as another day.
task response
Ask both questions in full: how long the interview will take, and if there will be any tests.
coherence and cohesion
Put each main point in its own paragraph: reason, sorry and new time, then questions.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear link words such as “Unfortunately”, “Therefore”, and “Furthermore” to help the reader follow your letter.
coherence and cohesion
Use a more formal start and end. Write “Dear Sir/Madam,” and end with “Yours faithfully,”.
task response
You included the reason for missing the interview, said sorry, asked for another time, and asked about the interview and tests.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear beginning, a middle about the new interview time, and a final part with questions.
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