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Your friend is planning to learn a new language and has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, include the following points: Thank them for asking your opinion. Recommend a language you think would be useful for them to learn. Explain why you think this language would be beneficial. Offer to help them with their learning process if possible.

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Dear Sascha , How have you been ? I received your letter , and I'm so glad that
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finally you've been
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you've finally
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 decided to learn a new language. I really appreciate that you've
been
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asked me for the advice . As you're planning to continue your career in
canada
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Canada
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, I would recommend you to go for a French
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program.
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 As there are so many
french speaking
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French-speaking
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canada
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Canada
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 where bilingual jobs are highly paid and
are in-demand
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in demand
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.
Moreover
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, it
also
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 helps to gain some extra points for residency.
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 , it's hard for beginners to learn and speak
french
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French
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, I got solution for that too. There is one online course available
,
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that
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I
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 would love to recommend
you
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 is ; 'French with Krystal'. I will assure you that , after taking 6 months of classes from them, you will be fluent
a speaker
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in speaking
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.
Additionally
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,they
also
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 provide recorded
vedios
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videos
,
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 are available for a year . I hope you will enjoy the journey of learning
this
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 new language
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 always feel free to contact me whenever needed. Sending my regards to your parents. Lots of love, Raj

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task response
You cover all the main points: thanks, a language choice, reasons, and help. Give a little more detail about how French can help in daily life and work in Canada.
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Your help is clear, but avoid saying your friend will surely be fluent after six months. Say it may help them speak with more ease.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. Use linking words with care, such as “Also” and “For this reason”, to show how each point joins.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main point in each paragraph. Put the course name and the details about its videos in the same paragraph, then make the last paragraph only about your own help and good wishes.
coherence and cohesion
Check word order and small grammar points so the ideas are easier to follow. For example, write “I am glad that you have decided” rather than “you've been decided”.
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You give a useful and clear reason for learning French: it can help with work and residency in Canada.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting, friendly tone, and closing suit a letter to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
The paragraphs move in a natural order: your reply, your advice, help with learning, and a warm ending.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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