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You recently attended a training course for your work. Your employer has asked you for your feedback on the training course. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter: Remind your employer what the course was about Explain why the course was useful to you in your work Suggest why the course may not be suitable for some of your other colleagues

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Dear Ms Tran, I am writing to give you my feedback about the training
course
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 I recently attended. As you know, the
course
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 was about using new AI technology in the workplace. It lasted for 3 days, including both presentations and
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. The trainer explained how to use the AI and showed me some new features. I found the
course
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 very useful for my work.
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, I learned how to use the AI more effectively, especially for designing 2D, rendering 3D and managing information for my project.
This
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 will help me save time and complete it more quickly.
Furthermore
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, I learned some new skills that I can use in my daily work.
However
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, I don't think the
course
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 would be suitable for all of my colleagues. Some people may have rich experience with
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 technology, so they find it too basic.
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, I think it was a useful
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, especially for employees who are not familiar with AI. Yours sincerely, Tien

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task response
Give a little more detail about the course. For example, say what kind of AI tool you used and name one task it helped you do.
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Explain more clearly why it may not suit other staff. You could add that some staff may need a more high level course, while others may need more basic computer help first.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. To make the links smoother, use words such as "also", "as a result", and "on the other hand".
coherence and cohesion
Keep each main point in its own paragraph. The course details, the good points, and the reasons it may not suit all staff are mostly well grouped.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear full phrases. For example, write "practical sessions" instead of "practical", and "they may find it too basic" instead of "they find it too basic".
task response
You cover all the main points: what the course was about, how it helps your work, and why it may not suit everyone.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is easy to follow. The greeting and closing are suitable, and the paragraphs are in a clear order.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Training program
  • Skill enhancement
  • Job responsibilities
  • Practical exercises
  • Hands-on experience
  • Operational efficiency
  • Subject matter
  • Prerequisites
  • Specialized knowledge
  • Teaching methodology
  • Learning preferences
  • Feedback
  • Course facilitator
  • Professional development
  • Engagement
  • Interactive components
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