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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The figure gives information about
Norbiton
Correct article usage
the Norbiton
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 industrial
area
Use synonyms
 and
location
Correct determiner usage
the
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 planned development in the future.
Overall
Linking Words
, the planned in the future has shops and medical
in
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facilities in
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 the
center
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centre
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.
In addition
Linking Words
, the
area
Use synonyms
 in the river has
pathway
Correct article usage
a pathway
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 to
farmland
Correct article usage
the farmland
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. In the
east
Add a comma
east,
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 they planned
school
Correct article usage
a school
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area
Use synonyms
 which was
factory
Correct article usage
a factory
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 place. The factory
area
Use synonyms
was
Verb problem
had
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 plenty of space below the river,
which
Correct pronoun usage
where they
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 planned to put their playground

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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