Write a letter to a friend about an item you borrowed last week, that accidentally got damaged. In your letter – Describe the item. – What was the damage? – What do you intend to do to rectify the problem?

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Dear John, How are you?I am writing to let you know about the item I
recieved
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received
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last
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week
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week, on August 20, 2026, I borrowed a pair of
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Sony-branded
headphones.It was blue in colour with white buds. About three days
later
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when I was hearing a podcast, I
accidently
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accidentally
immersed it under water. It was an unfortunate incident
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I haven't thought about it. The headphone's right side stopped functioning ,
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the battery is still in
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good condition.Plus
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buds are
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replacable
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replaceable
. I am really sorry for the
inconvienience
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inconvenience
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I will replace a new one as soon as possible within a month.Hope I won't trouble you in the future. Kind Regards, Jeya Surya Balaji

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Answer all three parts more clearly. Say what the headphones look like, what part does not work, and exactly how you will fix the problem.
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Make the plan more clear. For example, say that you will buy the same new headphones and give them to John by next month.
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Use a friendly but clear sorry tone. Ask John if this plan is okay.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear order: why you write, what happened, what is wrong, and what you will do.
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Put one main idea in each paragraph. The damage and the plan to fix it should be in different paragraphs.
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Leave a space after full stops and commas. This will make the letter easier to read.
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Use simple links such as 'However', 'Therefore', and 'As a result' to join ideas.
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You describe the item and say that the right side has stopped working.
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You give a clear plan to replace the headphones.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a greeting, a closing, and separate paragraphs.
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The date and the detail about listening to a podcast help the story feel real.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • borrowed item
  • a brand-new camera
  • in excellent condition
  • use it for a few days
  • accidental damage
  • slipped out of my hand
  • fell onto the floor
  • a cracked screen
  • a damaged lens
  • a broken handle
  • a deep scratch
  • feel terribly sorry
  • take full responsibility
  • get it repaired
  • a reliable repair shop
  • cover the repair costs
  • pay for the damage
  • replace it with a new one
  • make it up to you
  • hope you can forgive me
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