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The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The data shows the spending of the United States(US) and the United Kingdom(
UK
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) on petrol.
It is clear that
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 the US spent more money than the
UK
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 in
poorest
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the poorest
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 and middle-income classes.
However
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, for the richest
people
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, the
UK
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used
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paid
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 more
salaries
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in salaries
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 than the US. The poorest
citien
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citizens
 in the US used more than 5.5% of their income for
the
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apply
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fuel.
Moreover
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, the middle class spent around 3.5% of their salaries on
pertrol
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petrol
. These two groups of
people
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 in the US
used
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spent
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 more money than the same classes in the
UK
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. It is stated that the percentage of income spent by the richest has dropped to approximately 2.5%, which was lower
that
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than
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 that in the
UK
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.
In contrast
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, in the
UK
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, the poorest and middle-income
people
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in the
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apply
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UK
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 were used less percent of their money on fuel than
the
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in the
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 US (around 0.5% and 3.5%).
Nevertheless
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, the richest in the
UK
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 spent slightly higher than
than
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apply
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in the US
with
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, with
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 4%.
in
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In
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 conclusion, the poorest and middle-income groups in the US
used
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earned
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 more salaries than
that
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those
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 in the
UK
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on
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for
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 fuel. For the richest
people
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, the
UK
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 spent more income than the US on petrol.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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