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The Charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.

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The Charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.
The two pie
chart
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 illustrate how the customers rate the questions about the
services
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 provided to them in two different years in the
parkway hote
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Parkway Hotel
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Overall
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, it is clearly seen that the ratio of customers who opted
excellent
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for excellent
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services
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was been rised
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rose
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 from 5
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percent
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per cent
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 to 28
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percent
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per cent
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,
while
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 the proportion of very poor
services
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 was reduced to
great
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a great
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 extend and
other
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the ratio of other services
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services
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 ratio
also
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 changes alot .
To begin
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 , in
2005
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2005,
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 the ratio of people
voted
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who voted
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 for poor
services
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 was 21 , meanwhile in 2010 it was 12
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percent
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per cent
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Moreover
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 , there is a difference of 25
percentage
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per cent
 between visitors rated for good customer service in 2005 and 2010.
On the other hand
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 , the proportion of clients opted satisfactory in 2005 and 2010 was 45% and 17%
respectively
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 . Moving forward , there was a good
downfall
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decline
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 seen in pecentage of people opting for poor
services
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 from 21 to 12
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percent
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per cent
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Vocabulary: Replace the words services, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
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