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The graphs below show four categories of citrus fruits and the top three countries to which these were exported (in thousand tonnes) in 2012.

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The graphs below show four categories of citrus fruits and the top three countries to which these were exported (in thousand tonnes) in 2012.
The bar chart compares four
categories
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 of citrus fruits exported in three countries in 2012.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the highest
index
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 shown was South Africa, but the lowest
figure
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 indicated was Egypt and the United
States
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. As a table shows,
categories
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 of oranges
indicated
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are indicated
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, the biggest
index
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 was South Africa at 1000
tonnes
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, but the smallest
figure
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 shown was the United
States
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 , just over 470
tonnes
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. Compared to South Africa, Egypt has half as much. Regarding Lemons, the biggest
index
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 was Mexico at 500
tonnes
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, but the lowest
figure
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 shown was Argentina at 100
tonnes
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. The United
States
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indicated accounting
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accounted
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 for 200
tonnes
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. Coming to the Grapefruits, the biggest
figure
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 indicated was Turkey at 400
tonnes
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, but the lowest
index
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 shown was the United
States
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 at 200
tonnes
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. Mexico indicated accounting for 300
tonnes
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.
However
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, in other
categories
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, the highest
figure
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 indicated was Mexico , compared to Lemons
categories
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,
it
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which
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 remained relatively stable. Egypt and the United
States
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 figures indicated were similar at 20
tonnes
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words categories, index, figure, states, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "indicated" was used 7 times.
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