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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015.

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The chart below gives information about the number of social networking sites people used in Canada in 2014 and 2015.
The chart shows the percentage rate of how many social
net working
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networking
sites
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did
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apply
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people
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 used in Canada
and
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, and
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 it
could
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can be
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 seen that there is an increase in
number
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the number
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 of
using
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people using
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 social
net working
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networking
 from 2014 to 2015. The chart indicates that in no
sites
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 and one site, there were 22% and 36% of
people
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 in Canada who were only using no or only one
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sites
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site
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, but in
2015
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2015,
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 there
is
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was
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 a decline in
percentage
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the percentage
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 that only 21% and 28% of
people
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 in
Canda
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Canada
 did not use or only
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used
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 one social
networkng
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networking
 site.
Furthermore
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, the chart clearly
show
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shows
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 that in 2014 the percentage of
people
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 in
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Canada
 that were using more than two
sites
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 was lower than in 2015,
which
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as
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 the bars in 2014 were
overall
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 slightly shorter than the bars in 2015.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sites, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart overview
  • social networking sites
  • trends
  • adoption
  • comparison
  • significant changes
  • segment
  • growth or reduction
  • social media habits
  • patterns
  • multi-platform usage
  • decline
  • non-users
  • conclusion
  • digital communication
  • social media marketing
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