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The pie charts below show the percentages of tourists from tourists regions visiting a European country in 1980 and 2020. Summaries the information by selecting and pr reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts below show the percentages of tourists from tourists regions visiting a European country in 1980 and 2020. Summaries the information by selecting and pr reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the rate of tourists from overseas visiting a
European
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 country in two
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different
 years.
Overall
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, the
raanking
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ranking
 of
percentage
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the percentage
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 of people visiting
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European
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countries
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 remained stable, and
majority
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the majority
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 come from Europe.
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Europe
 marked the highest in both 1980 and 2020 at 52% to 39%, but the
amount
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number
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 of
European
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 people
that
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who
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 go to other
European
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countries
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 decreased. Africa was in the
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lead in both of the two years with 14%. Oceania was the third
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group
 that went to
European
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countries
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 with the account of 11% in 1980, and 13% in 2020
respectivlly
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respectively
. It is
notible
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noticeable
 from the graph that the number of people who came from Asian
countries
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 increased
significantlly
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significantly
 by almost double from 10% in 1980. North America is the second smallest group going to Europe
which
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 dropped from 9% to 7%.
Lastlly
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, South
Ameica
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America
 marked the least out of all,
while
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 an improvement can be seen
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, which
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 rose from 4% to 6%.

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