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The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make c

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The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make c
The given charts illustrate the number of
students
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 who attend
dance
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classes
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 based on age group and provide information about the location of
dance
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classes
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 in a town in Australia.
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, it is noticeable that most of the
students
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 prefer ballet and modern
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,
whereas
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 private studios experienced the highest percentage of
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classes
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.
To begin
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 with, 48% of
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 attend private studios for
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classes
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, while24% of
students
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 practice dancing in school halls after finishing school. College-based studios and community halls and others represent the lowest percentages, at10% and 18% respectively.
According to
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 the types of
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classes
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, 600
students
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 under 11 years prefer ballet, and half of
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these students
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 are over 11 to 16 years.
In contrast
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, modern
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 is preferred by 300 dancers under 11 years, and around 500
students
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 from
age
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ages
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 11 to 16 attend modern
dance
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. Tap
classes
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 are the least
favored
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favoured
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 by all the
students
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, which made up 500.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, dance, classes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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