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Band 3.5

You recently attended a course. Write to the organiser about what you liked and suggest an improvement.

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Dear
Mr.
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 John, I am writing regarding
introduction
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the introduction
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, the
first
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paragraph
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 in
lecture
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the lecture
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, and I would like to suggest an improvement.
Firs
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First
 of all, the plot of
introduction
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the introduction
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 was precise, the
first
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paragraph
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was included too complex topics and
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included too complex topics and was
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 difficult to
reach for presence
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understand
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.
For instance
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, you used
IPad
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an iPad
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 to explain the motor movement
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otherwise
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; otherwise
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, nobody have IPad to save the information and revise
them
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it
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.
Secondly
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, the
first
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paragraph
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 was too long and boring.
This
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 is because the time
needs
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 to completed
first
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paragraph
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roughly
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is roughly
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 two hours. I would
very
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 grateful if you could provide IPad for every attendance and that
open
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opens
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 new opportunities to practice what we did. I look forward to
hear
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hearing
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 from you Yours sincerely, Saif

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task response
Say the course name and date at the start. Clearly say what you liked, then give one clear change you want.
task response
Your idea about giving iPads is not clear. Explain how this will help all people take notes and do the work.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each part: what you liked, what was hard, and your suggestion.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple links such as “First,” “However,” “For example,” and “Finally” to help the reader follow your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Keep the ending polite and clear: “I look forward to hearing from you.”
task response
You give both a good point about the introduction and a suggestion for the course.
coherence and cohesion
You use a clear letter form with a greeting, body parts, and a polite ending.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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