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Band 3.5

You borrowed something from a friend and lost it.Write to apologise and explain what happened.

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Dear David, I am writing to tell you about lost
your
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laptop
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 that I borrowed from you
last
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 week. I want like to apologise to you about what happened. Everything happened suddenly, when I was going to
cafe
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the cafe
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 to do some of my duties. I
interrupted
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was interrupted
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 by
shoplifter
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a shoplifter
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 tries to
stole
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steal
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 the
laptop
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 that was in 456L Shineroad.
However
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, I struggled to avoid that. Unfortunately, there are other shoplifters who help them
to stole
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steal
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 the
laptop
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. Fortunately, I reported
every thing
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everything
 to
police
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the police
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 office about that to start
investigate
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investigating
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 and select suspects.
Furthermore
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, the police
are
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have
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 found some
clue
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clues
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 about that
and
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, and
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 they told me two days
left
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are left
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 to complete the investigation. I hope you do not panic or
furious
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get furious
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 about that because everything will be clear. In any
case
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 will I buy you
new
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a new
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laptop
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.
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?
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 See you soon, Saif

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task response
Say clearly that you are sorry in the first part. Then explain where and when it happened. Give a clear plan to help your friend, such as paying for a new laptop if it is not found.
task response
Use a calm and friendly tone. Do not tell your friend not to be angry. Instead, show that you understand how they may feel.
coherence and cohesion
Put the letter in a clear order: apology, what happened, what you did, and what you will do next.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main point. The part about the police can be one short paragraph, and the final plan can be another paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words such as “First”, “Then”, “After that”, and “Finally” to make the story easier to follow.
task response
You include an apology, an explanation of the loss, and action with the police. These are important parts of the letter.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a greeting, several paragraphs, and a closing. This gives it a clear basic shape.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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