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The chart and table below show the results Of a Survey Of library users at a university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Categories of library users: Full-time undergraduate: 44% Full-time postgraduate: 25% Part-time postgraduate: 16% Distance learning (all courses): 8% Academic staff: 7% Library user satisfaction: Library opening hours: 65% very satisfied, 35% fairly satisfied, 0% not satisfied Helpfulness of staff: 95% very satisfied, 5% fairly satisfied, 0% not satisfied Availability of books: 50% very satisfied, 40% fairly satisfied, 10% not satisfied Availability of journals: 45% very satisfied, 35% fairly satisfied, 20% not satisfied Reliability of Wi-Fi: 48% very satisfied, 33% fairly satisfied, 19% not satisfied

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The chart and table below show the results Of a Survey Of library users at a university. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Categories of library users: Full-time undergraduate: 44% Full-time postgraduate: 25% Part-time postgraduate: 16% Distance learning (all courses): 8% Academic staff: 7% Library user satisfaction: Library opening hours: 65% very satisfied, 35% fairly satisfied, 0% not satisfied Helpfulness of staff: 95% very satisfied, 5% fairly satisfied, 0% not satisfied Availability of books: 50% very satisfied, 40% fairly satisfied, 10% not satisfied Availability of journals: 45% very satisfied, 35% fairly satisfied, 20% not satisfied Reliability of Wi-Fi: 48% very satisfied, 33% fairly satisfied, 19% not satisfied
The pie chart illustrates the different categories of
library
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 users at a university, followed by a table which compares their level of satisfaction.
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full-time
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 the highest percentage of
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 visitors,
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 the
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 opening hours
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 the most satisfactory aspect recorded among them.
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, one of the striking
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 reported by the survey is that full-time undergraduate
students
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 account for the largest proportion of
library
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 members with 44%, followed by full-time
post graduate
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postgraduate
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 with 25%, part-time
post graduate
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postgraduate
students
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 with 16 % and, ultimately, by distance learning and academic staff, whose shares amount to 8% and 7%, respectively. In terms of satisfaction recorded by the different members,
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, helpfulness of the staff positively tops the list at 95%, with
library
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 opening hours accounting for the second most positive feature at 65%.
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, the least positive
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 are embodied by the availability of journals, whose
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 stands at 20%, reliability of Wi-Fi at 19% and, ultimately, availability of books, at 10%.

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