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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent

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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent
The Line
gragh
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graph
 gives information about
Number
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the number
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 of tourists visiting a Caribbean
islan
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island
 between the period from 2010 and 2017, and comparisons where they relvent, with
Million
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millions
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 of
visitors
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.
Overall
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, the
gragh
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graph
 shows
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships and
visitors
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 staying on
island
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the island
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 are
record
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recording
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 a marked rise in 2010 and 2017,
while
Linking Words
 most of the
visitors
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 staying on cruise ships
,
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.
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 In 2010
untill
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until
 2014 it was a huge change, the
visitors
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 was shine over and over every year. In 2017,
was the highest number
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the highest number was reached
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,
jumped
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jumping
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 to 3.5 miliion visitor,
due to
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be
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apply
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the
most
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largest
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 increase
year ever of
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in
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visitors
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 to the island,
while
Linking Words
2015
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in 2015
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 and
2016
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2016,
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 there is unchange. In 2010, it was the lowest
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visitors
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number of visitors
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 to the island
in
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on
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 both side by ships and staying, was declined toaround low number, around 1 million.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • the number of tourists
  • visitors
  • island
  • year
  • years
  • from
  • to
  • over
  • during
  • increase
  • rise
  • grow
  • go up
  • climb
  • peak
  • highest
  • fall
  • decrease
  • dip
  • fluctuate
  • change
  • trend
  • overall
  • compare
  • in comparison with
  • in thousands
  • early
  • middle
  • late
  • reach
  • reach a peak
  • the beginning
  • the end
  • higher
  • lower
  • stable
  • steady
  • notable
  • period
  • towards
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