You share your room with another student in the college hostel. You find it very difficult to study there because he or She always has parties and friends visiting. write a letter to the hostel warden complaining about your displeasure with the roommate.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to bring to your attention a serious problem with Sozan in our shared
room
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, which has made it difficult for me to concentrate on my university projects. The major problem is that she often holds parties with her friends, which makes the
room
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crowded and noisy.
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, I can not carry out my tasks.
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, she always comes back to the
room
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late, particularly when I sleep. As she is too noisy, I wake up , and I can not sleep well.
This
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inconvenience makes me sleepy in classrooms. I would appreciate it if you could take appropriate action to address
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challenge. I would
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be grateful if you could change my
room
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before examinations, as I have to study hard to pass them, especially since it is my
last
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semester, and I have to go to my hometown. Thank you for your consideration and time. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Mohammadreza Hadavi Bavil

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task response
Say more clearly what you want the warden to do. For example, ask the warden to speak to your roommate first, and then ask for a room change if the problem does not stop.
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Give one or two clear facts, such as how often the parties happen or how late your roommate comes back. This will make your complaint stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, problem, and request. To make it easier to read, put the party problem and the late-night problem in two short paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words to show the result of each problem. For example: "Because of the noise, I cannot study." Then: "As a result, I feel tired in class."
coherence and cohesion
Keep your request in the last body paragraph. The point about going to your home town is not needed, so remove it or explain why it matters.
task response
You explain the main problems well: parties, noise, poor sleep, and trouble studying. You also ask for action and a room change.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is easy to follow. It has a polite opening, clear body paragraphs, and a suitable closing.
coherence and cohesion
You use useful links such as "As a result" and "Moreover" to connect your ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • formal complaint
  • roommate
  • hostel warden
  • study in peace
  • loud parties
  • friends visiting
  • make noise
  • disturb my studies
  • late at night
  • coming in and out
  • lack of sleep
  • unable to focus
  • politely requested
  • no improvement
  • take action
  • solve the problem
  • change rooms
  • follow hostel rules
  • quiet environment
  • I would be grateful
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