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The pie charts below show usage share of desktop browsers in 2019 and 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts below show usage share of desktop browsers in 2019 and 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart
illustrate of
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illustrates
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 the usage
desktop
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of desktop
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 browsers between a year of 2019 and 2021. The information is
comparing
Wrong verb form
compared
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 in percentage and given
the data
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apply
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in two
section
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sections
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 of the usage.
Overall
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, the largest browsers
of
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in
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 the usges is chrome follow by
safari
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Safari
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 and
edge
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Edge
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.
While
Linking Words
,
Punctuation problem
apply
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 the smallest is
other
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the other
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.
However
Linking Words
, from the information given
all
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, all
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 browsers
has
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have
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 been used into three years period
time
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apply
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. First of all, 69% of chrome is being
use
Wrong verb form
used
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 in 2019.
As well as
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,
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apply
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 safari and
firefox
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Firefox
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 are being use 9% in the same
amount
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rate
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. Whist, 8% in others section searching into
broswers
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browsers
.
While
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,
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apply
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 only 5 per
cent
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 in the
broswer
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browser
 of
edge
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Edge
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.
On the other hand
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, in the year of
2021
Punctuation problem
2021,
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 2 per
cent
Use synonyms
 has
been
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apply
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dropped
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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is standing using
Wrong verb form
stands
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 at 67% in
chrome
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Chrome
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.
Therefore
Linking Words
, in the section
broswer
Correct your spelling
browser
 of
safari
Capitalize the proper name
Safari
show examples
 and
edge
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Edge
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 are increase 4 per
cent
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 and 1 per
cent
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 of the usage.
By contrast
Linking Words
,
firefox
Capitalize the proper name
Firefox
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 and others
are
Verb problem
fell
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 slightly
fell
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by
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 1 to 2 per
cent
Use synonyms
 in 2021.

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