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You share your room with another student in the college hostel. You find it very difficult to study there because he or She always has parties and friends visiting. write a letter to the hostel warden complaining about y

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I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with my roommate about her irresponsible
behaviour
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 that having a huge impact on my stay was
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 a miserable time because I
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 to prepare for the semester exams.

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Write a full letter with a greeting, clear details of the problem, what you have done, and what you want the warden to do.
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Say that your roommate has parties and friends in the room, and explain how this stops you from studying for your exams.
coherence and cohesion
Use short, clear sentences. For example: “My roommate often has parties in our room. Her friends make a lot of noise.”
coherence and cohesion
Put each main point in its own paragraph: the problem, its effect on you, and your request.
coherence and cohesion
Add a polite closing, such as “Yours faithfully,” followed by your name.
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You clearly say that you are unhappy and that you need time to study for your exams.
coherence and cohesion
The purpose of your letter is clear from the first sentence.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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