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The following maps show the changes that have taken place in the centre of a town since 1700. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The following maps show the changes that have taken place in the centre of a town since 1700. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram maps illustrate the differences in
town
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the town
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 between 1700
to
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and
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 nowadays.
Overall
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, the city has undergone significant changes. Usual green spaces were converted into
a
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modern buildings. New changes have led to
widneder
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wider
 roads and
larger
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a larger
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 population. Centuries ago, the main spots,
such
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 as a hotel, a market square,
a
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and a
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church
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church,
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 were located in the
center
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centre
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 and surrounded by the agricultural facilities. The Goode farm was positioned
to
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on
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 the northern side of the area, connected to
the
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apply
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Market
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street
Capitalize the proper name
Street
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 on the left. In the same
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street
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street,
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 a field was built up with houses, which were connected from below with a Deters
street
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. The three shops above the field were located at the bottom of the plan. A Stengel farm was placed in the bottom-right corner, leading directly to a spacious place with a river and bridge. Since
than
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then
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, the town has witnessed extensive renovation. The river, the church and all three
streets
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street
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 names have remained unchanged. The roads have
became
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become
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 widened,
were added a crosswalk
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a crosswalk was added,
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 and extend route on
the
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Market
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street
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Street
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, a traffic light and
roundabout
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a roundabout
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 on
the
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Peter's
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street
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Street
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. The city
center
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centre
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 has slightly changed,
expect
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except for
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 the
expand
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expanded
 hotel building and open green space. At the top of the map, the Goode farm was replaced by a huge car park and residential houses constructed along the eastern side of the town and the southern part
on the
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of
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 Streggle
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street
Capitalize the proper name
Street
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. The
right bottom
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bottom right
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 corner was transformed into a big supermarket on the right of the shops. At the upper left
corner
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corner,
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 the bridge ares was undergone minor changes,
such
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 as
extended
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being extended
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 with a public park.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words street with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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