IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The bar graph shows the percentage growth in average properly prices in three diferent countries between 2007 and 2010. Summarize the infomration by selecting and reporting the key main features, and make comparison where relavant.

6.5 / 9
Band scoreView breakdown ↓
✍️ Want to check your own essay?Write on this topic →
The bar graph shows the percentage growth in average properly prices in three diferent countries between 2007 and 2010. Summarize the infomration by selecting and reporting the key main features, and make comparison where relavant.
The given line graph illustrates the average growth in property
prices
Use synonyms
 between 2007
to
Correct word choice
and
show examples
 2010 in Algeria, China and
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
Argentina.
Overall
Linking Words
, there is a downward trend in property
value
Use synonyms
 in Algeria
as
Punctuation problem
, as
show examples
 there is an upward trend in the
value
Use synonyms
 of houses in China over the years.
While
Linking Words
prices
Use synonyms
 fluctuated in Argentina
acorss
Correct your spelling
across
 all years. In detail,
prices
Use synonyms
 of apartments in Algeria
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
show examples
 significantly higher in 2007 as the
value
Use synonyms
fall
Wrong verb form
fell
show examples
 remarkably in 2008
about
Change preposition
by about
show examples
to
Change preposition
apply
show examples
4.5
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
.
However
Linking Words
,
housing
Correct article usage
the housing
show examples
 percentage was 2% in 2007 in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
China
as
Punctuation problem
, as
show examples
 the demand
of
Change preposition
for
show examples
 flats
enhanced
Verb problem
increased
show examples
 notably in 2008
was
Wrong verb form
, reaching
show examples
 around to 4.1 percent.
Therefore
Linking Words
, the demand continued to grow in the upcoming years and record the highest increase in 2010 were approximately 6.2% in 2010. As for more,
purchasing
Correct article usage
the purchasing
show examples
value
Use synonyms
 of houses in Argentina was about 3.1% in 2007 as the
prices
Use synonyms
 climbed in 2008 and
reach
Wrong verb form
reached
show examples
 a point of 4.8%.
Moreover
Linking Words
, the
value
Use synonyms
 of houses
fall
Wrong verb form
fell
show examples
 dramatically in 2009
were
Change preposition
by
show examples
 around to 1.5%. There
is
Wrong verb form
was
show examples
 a steady rise in the
value
Use synonyms
 of shops in 2010
was
Correct pronoun usage
, which was
show examples
 approximately 2.5
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words prices, value with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average property prices
  • percentage growth
  • a steady increase
  • a sharp rise
  • a slight decline
  • a gradual fall
  • a fluctuating trend
  • remain relatively stable
  • reach a peak
  • hit a low point
  • record the highest growth
  • experience the lowest increase
  • outperform the other countries
  • rise considerably
  • fall marginally
  • the gap widened
  • the figure stood at
  • compared with
  • by contrast
  • over the four-year period
What to do next:
Look at other essays: