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You were sent by your company to attend a meeting in another country, but you are not happy with the hotel your organizer booked for you. Write a letter to an organizer about the meeting details What you did not like about the hotel what you want organizer to do about it?

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Dear Sir, I hope you are doing well
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 I'm writing to inform you that I'm unhappy with the booking you have organised at the X hotel for me to attend a meeting in another country. First of all, I would like to provide you
some
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 important details about our
last
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 meeting.
This
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 meeting presents a deal with another company to buy some electrical tools
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 good discount on price to enhance our productivity at
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home.
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, there are some critical points related to the
hotle
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hotel
 that need to be
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by
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 your team. The X hotel was not reaching the
requierment qulity
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required quality
 for the meeting with our
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delegate
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, the rooms were unclean , and the parking area was limited.
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, poor service during the meeting ,
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 as food and drinks.
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, I'm asking to cancel the hotel and looking for another one
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 better service. I would recomend five starts hotles. That will help me to have more meetings and
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be more comfortable. Warm regards, Ib

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task response
Give clear meeting details, such as the date, place, and why the meeting is important. Say more clearly how the hotel problems affected the meeting.
task response
Make your request more direct. Ask the organizer to book a new hotel, and say what you need: clean rooms, enough parking, and good food and drink service.
coherence and cohesion
Use short paragraphs with one main point in each: meeting details, hotel problems, and your request. This will make the letter easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words such as "First", "Also", "Because of this", and "Finally". Check that each sentence is complete and clear.
tone
Keep the tone polite but firm. Instead of "cancel the hotel", write "I would be grateful if you could arrange another hotel".
language
Check spelling and word forms, for example: "hotel", "requirements", "quality", "dealer", "recommend", and "five-star hotels".
task response
You explain that you are unhappy with the hotel and give clear examples, including unclean rooms, limited parking, and poor food and drink service.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a greeting, a clear reason for writing, and a polite closing. You also use linking words such as "First of all", "Secondly", and "Therefore".
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gratitude
  • arrange/arrangement
  • specifics
  • cleanliness
  • amenities
  • service
  • location
  • improve
  • solution
  • alternative
  • accommodation
  • recommendation
  • organize/organizer
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