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the map below is of the town Galsdon. A new supermarket (s) is planned for the town. the map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

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the map below is of the town Galsdon. A new supermarket (s) is planned for the town. the map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
The map
compare
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compares
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 two possible sites for the new supermarket in the
town
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Galsdon
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of Galsdon
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.
Overall
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,
Garldson
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Garldson's
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overall
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population
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 is 65,000. The first possible
site
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located
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is located
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 in the northen west of the countryside, at the nothern west of the
town
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. The second
site
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located
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is located
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at
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in
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 the
town
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centre
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. The first
site
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located
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is located
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 in the countryside,
spcefically
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specifically
 in the northenwest of the
town
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centre
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, between the railway and the main road to Hindon.
Site
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 number one
serve
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serves
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 the housing area in the north of
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town
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the town
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centre
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.
it's
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also
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 far from Hindon
12
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, 12
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 Km that have 10,000
population
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. The second
site
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located
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is located
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 in the
town
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centre
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,
spcefically
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specifically
 to the south of the railway.
it's
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It's
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 25 Km to Cransdon
that
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, that
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 have 29,000
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,
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population
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 and 16 km to
Bransdon
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Bransdon,
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that have 15,000
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which has a population of 15,000
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population
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. It is
also
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 near
to
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apply
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the housing area in the south of the
town
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centre
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, population, site, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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