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Governments should spend more on public transport than on new roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
In recent years, the issue of
development
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the development
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 of public
transport
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 has sparked
wide-ranging
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a wide-ranging
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 debate.
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 some argue that it is necessary for governments to
prioritize
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prioritise
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 public
transport
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instead
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 of new roads, I largely believe that
priority
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the priority
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 of public
transport
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 is much higher than newly constructed roads.
This
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 essay will examine the main reasons supporting
this
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 view and illustrate why
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 opposing arguments.
Body paragraph 1
One compelling reason for
this
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 stance is the convenience and efficiency that
people
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 ranging from local residents to tourists can gain from various forms of public
transportation
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.
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 is primarily because a majority of expenditure contributed to improvement of public
transport
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 can help create
more
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a more
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 advanced
travel
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 experience in a city, which in turn
allow
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allows
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people
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 living there to be more willing to
travel
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 to and from places
due to
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 better facilities and service. Over time,
this
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 effect has been shown to encourage more tourists and citizens to visit attractions and contribute to the economic growth of the city.
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,
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apply
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research by economists in Shanghai reveals that more developed
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 facilities
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have
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 made it easier for
people
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 to
travel
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 between different tourist attractions, leading to much more revenue from tourism and consumerism compared to before with underdeveloped
transportation
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.
Such
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 evidence highlights how spending on public
transportation
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 benefits society as a whole.
Body paragraph 2
Another important factor is
that
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apply
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the sustainability of
city
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the city
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environment
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. The rationale here is that development of public
transport
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 can provide
people
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 with more opportunities to go on a trip with relatively lower consumption of fossil fuels because most public
transport
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are
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is
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 powered by renewable energy.
This
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 impact is especially significant in the context of
sustainable
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a sustainable
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environment
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, where carbon dioxide emissions are continuing
eliminating
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to be eliminated
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. Recent studies have demonstrated that
reduction
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on
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of
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 private cars can bring better air quality for the
environment
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, reinforcing the idea that public
transport
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 supports long-term sustainability.
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 some may
content
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contend
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 that
construction
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the construction
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 of new roads can make it more flexible for
people
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 to commute to and from without having to
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 for a specific time to
travel
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 by public
transport
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,
this
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 view overlooks the rapid growth of carbon dioxide emissions brought by private cars, which makes the benefits far more convincing.
Conclusion
In conclusion, despite
of concern
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concerns
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 that public
transportation
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 may reduce the flexibility of travelling, the advantages of priority of development in public
transport
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, as illustrated by the enhancement of economy and
environment
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due to
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 frequent use of public
transport
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, clearly outweigh its drawbacks. Looking ahead, it is crucial for governments to invest more funds
to
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in the
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 service of public
transport
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, since
such
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 measures will ensure that more developed
transport
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 remains both effective and inclusive in the future.

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task response
State your view in a more direct way. For example, say that you agree that public transport should get more money, but new roads are still needed in some places.
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Develop each main idea with a clearer link to government spending. Explain how more buses, trains, and better service can cut car use, save time, and help people who do not own cars.
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Be careful with broad claims. Public transport is not always run by renewable energy. Say that it can use less fuel per person than private cars instead.
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Use a more clear example. The Shanghai example is useful, but explain what was built, who used it, and how this led to more visitor spending.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two body parts, and an ending. Make the first line of each body part state the full main point more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are very long and hard to follow. Split them into two or three short sentences, especially in the first body part.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with care. The phrase “why outweigh opposing arguments” is not clear. Write “why the benefits are greater than the drawbacks” instead.
coherence and cohesion
Keep the same key words through the essay. Use “public transport” and “new roads” more often, rather than changing to less clear phrases such as “priority of development in public transport.”}],
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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