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The table below gives information about the average annual spending of university students in three dif erent countries.

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The table below gives information about the average annual spending of university students in three dif erent countries.
The table compares total expenditure in three countries and shows the proportions of
this
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 spending allocated to five different categories of living costs.
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,
Country
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 A recorded the highest total spending, at US$5,000, followed closely by
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 B with US$4,500,
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 expenditure in
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 C was considerably lower, at just US$1,500.
Accommodation
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 accounted for the largest share of spending in Countries A and B,
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food
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 was the biggest expense in
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 C. In
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 A, 45% of total expenditure was devoted to
accommodation
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, by far the highest proportion among the five categories.
Food
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 and leisure each represented 22%,
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 only 3% was spent on books. The remaining 8% went on other expenses. A similar pattern can be seen in
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 B, where
accommodation
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 made up 35% of total spending.
Food
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 and leisure accounted for relatively comparable shares, at 28% and 23% respectively.
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, books represented 9%, and other expenses made up just 5%.
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 C showed a noticeably different distribution.
Food
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 was the largest category, at 36%, followed by
accommodation
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 at 30%. Spending on books was
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 comparatively high, at 21%, seven times the proportion recorded in
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 A. Leisure accounted for 12%,
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 only 1% was allocated to other expenses.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words country, accommodation, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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