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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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Introduction
In certain countries, owning a property is more desirable and significant
rather
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than renting an
accomondation
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accommodation
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This
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 essay will explore a number of reasons for
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 preference and argue that, despite some drawbacks, it is largely a positive development.
Body paragraph 1
Some of the most common reasons for
possessing
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owning
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 a home is financial security it may provide. Individuals can pay a
mortage
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mortgage
 which buys an asset you keep,
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 rent money is gone forever.
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, after 20 years, a homeowner owns a valuable house,
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whereas
 a renter has only receipts.
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, in many countries buying a property is determined as symbol of success. Meaning that that expensive purchase is seen as
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 life achievement, demonstrating that an individual has reached financial independence and is ready to establish a stable life.
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, more and more people prefer obtaining their own houses, in place of renting.
Conclusion
One major benefit of
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 trend is psychological peace of mind. Living in
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 property provides a strong
sence
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sense
 of emotional security.
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 renters may constantly face the stress of rent increases or paying until the deadline, homeowners enjoy stability, knowing they have a permanent shelter.
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, not having a landlord offers people stability and independence. The publicity want full control over their living space without fear of eviction. Unlike renters, householders can renovate or keep pets without asking for permission.

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task response
You explain why people want to own a home well: money, safety, and social success. However, you do not fully answer the second question. You say it is mostly positive, but you do not give a clear negative side. Add one short point about high debt, house prices, or less freedom to move.
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Add a final paragraph. Restate your main view and say why the good points are stronger than the bad points. This will make your answer feel complete.
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Some ideas need more detail. For example, explain how a home can grow in value, or how a large loan can cause stress if a person loses work.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start and two body paragraphs. The order of ideas is easy to follow: reasons first, then the good side.
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Use clearer links between ideas. For example: “First, owning a home can give people financial safety.” Then: “Second, it can show success in society.” This will make each point stand out.
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Avoid long or unclear sentences. For example, “Meaning that that expensive purchase...” is not a full sentence. Join it to the sentence before it or rewrite it as: “This expensive purchase is often seen as a major life success.”
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Use the same word form and point of view. Write “their own property” instead of “own property”, and avoid changing from “individuals” to “you” in the same idea.
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You give a clear main view in the first paragraph: owning a home is mostly a good thing, even though it may have some bad sides.
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The example of a homeowner having a house after many years, while a renter only has rent records, helps explain your money point.
coherence and cohesion
The paragraphs have clear main ideas, and words such as “For example”, “In addition”, and “Moreover” help the reader follow your points.
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Your second body paragraph stays focused on safety, peace of mind, and control over the home.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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