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The graph below describes the use of fixed telephone lines, mobile phones, and internet between 1994 and 2005 in China.

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The graph below describes the use of fixed telephone lines, mobile phones, and internet between 1994 and 2005 in China.
The chart illustrates information about fixed communication
system
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 (
telephone
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 lines, mobile phones, and
internet
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the internet
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) from 1994 to 2005 in China. ​
Overall
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, three figures witnessed an enormous growth,
while
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 the usage of mobile
phone
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phones
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 reached a peak from its initial state.
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, the figures for fixed
telephone
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line
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lines
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 and internet users saw a significant rise during
a
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the
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 period. ​In more detail, people who were used
from
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to
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 mobile
phone
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phones
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 remained unchanged at 0 between 1994 and 1995, and
then
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this
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 figure witnessed a dramatic increase to 350 in 2003 before
reached
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 a peak at 450
at the end
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 of the year. ​Notably, fixed
telephone
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line
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lines
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 started to
growth
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grow
 from almost 30 to 200 in 2000.
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, there was a significant increase
at
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of
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 350
mln
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million
 in fixed
telephone
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line
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lines
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 in the final year.
Moreover
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, usage of
internet
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the internet
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 remained steady during
2
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year
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years
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 from 1994 to 1996 at 0. Over
next
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the next
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 4 years,
this
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 figure
also
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 saw a gradual increase to approximately 200
mln
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million
 people in 2005.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words telephone with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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