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The plans below show the Site of a farm in 1950 and the same Site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Introduction
The plans illustrate a farm site named “Beechwood Farm” in the year 1950 and the plan today.
Body paragraph 1
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 at the beginning of the period, the farm infrastructure was empty compared to the end of the period, where a lot of work had been done.
Body paragraph 2
It is clear that
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, today, many new infrastructures have been introduced into the place.
For example
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, the track was replaced by a road.
Then
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, up to the road, a new parking lot opened, but
also
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 an important place for some solar panels, and a large place for a camping field in nature, with some trees and plants surrounding the infrastructure, with a parking lot included.
Conclusion
On the other side of the road, a new shop was added, directly in the fruit trees area.
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, a barn was added too.
Finally
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, up to the river where the old barn was, they created a new holiday cottage area.

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Give a clearer main picture. Say that the farm changed from a working farm into a place for visitors, with a shop, car park, camping area and holiday homes.
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Report the main changes in both parts of the map. Some old features are not fully described, such as the old barn, fruit trees, track and river area.
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Be careful with map details. Do not say that the track was replaced by a road unless the plan clearly shows this. Also make clear what stayed in the same place and what was moved or removed.
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Use more exact place words, such as north of, next to, across the road, near the river, and in the south-east corner. This will make the report easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple four-part plan: introduction, overall picture, one side of the site, then the other side. This will give the report a clear order.
coherence and cohesion
Group changes by area instead of listing them one by one. For example, describe the road side first, then describe the river side.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are too long and hard to understand. Break them into shorter sentences. For example, write one sentence about the car park, one about the solar panels, and one about the camping field.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear linking words such as while, whereas, in contrast, also, and finally. Avoid using “Then” too often.
coherence and cohesion
Do not repeat “It is clear that” at the start of body paragraphs. Start directly with the map change.
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You identify several important new parts of the site, including the road, car park, solar panels, camping field, shop and holiday cottage area.
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You make an overall comparison between the earlier farm and the site today.
coherence and cohesion
The report has an introduction, an overall statement and body paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
You try to guide the reader around the map by using place phrases such as “On the other side of the road” and “up to the river.”
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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