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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information b

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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information b
This
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 pie graph illustrates data on the police account from 2017 and 2018 in one place of Britan.
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, the table visualises the aggregate that came from.
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, there are
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 types of
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, which means how those money came from. The
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sources
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 are from the National Government, Local Taxes, and other
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.
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, the largest incoming allowance is from the National Government , and the second largest is from Local Taxes.So, in the
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 it is other
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. The pie scheme it illustrate us
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 pieces of information about how polices were spent their funds.
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, in 2017 salaries were taking
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 of the quarter of the pie scheme.
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 in 2018 it decreased by 6 percent which means the were less spent on salaries.And, other information is building and transport , which were both in year they were in same percentage of 17 per cent. In the end
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 data is technology. It is the lowest percentage of intake in
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 tabulation. In 2017, it was 8 ratio , but next year it increased by 6 per cent. We can see in both years that technology was used slightly more often than before , and the salaries were decreased by a small amount of money.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, sources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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