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The bar graph below represents data about the clubs joined by people of two different age groups at a leisure centre in a small city.

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The graph illustrates an infromation for the
number
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 of clubs that
people
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 joined in two different
age
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 groups at a leisure centre in a small city.
Overall
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, it is evident that cycling accounts for the highest
number
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 of
members
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at all
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, meanwhile, it is recorded as the lowest figure of old
people
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 group. Another notable feature is that the photography
club
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 has the same
number
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 of
members
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 in both groups.
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, with the first three
club
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 types, the
number
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 of old
members
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 of the gardening
club
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 was almost twice the
number
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 of young
members
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, which is roughly 27 and 54
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members
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members,
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 respectively.
While
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 the photography has exactly the same
number
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 of
people
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 of
the
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different
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age
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ages
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, which is approximately 45, the young individuals overtake the older individuals by almost 10
members
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 in the fitness
club
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. On the other three
club
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 types, the young
people
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 of the arts and crafts
club
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is
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are
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 60, which is three times as high as that of elderly
people
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,
whereas
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 the two groups of music or dance clubs are relatively
colse
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close
 to each others around 53
members
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.
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, the cycling
club
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 has about 65
members
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of 25-35
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aged 25- 35
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age
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 and 10
members
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of 55-65
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aged 55- 65
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age
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, which is the most significant difference in the
number
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 of member types.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, age, members, club with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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