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The table below gives information about the population of New Zealand between 2011 and 2012

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The table below gives information about the population of New Zealand between 2011 and 2012
The given chart compares the population of New Zealand in 2011 and 2012.
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, there was an increase in the
populace
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population
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, especially in the
40 plus age-groups
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40-plus age groups
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Whereas
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, there was a decline in the percentage of people under 40. The table shows a slight decrease in the age groups of under 15 and 15-39, respectively. In
2011
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2011,
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 the population of
under 15 youngsters
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youngsters under 15
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 was 801,750, which slightly reduced to 800,000 in 2012.
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, the number of people between 15
-
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and
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39
also
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 displayed a similar 0.2% decline, falling from 1,520,000 to 1,500,000.
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, there was a considerable rise in ages 40-64, going from 1,400,000 to 1,460,000, making a 0.6% raise. The most significant climb was seen in
age
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the age
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above
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group above
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 65 years, which grew from 500,000 to 900,000, showcasing the
most
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apply
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sharpest increase over the period.

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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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