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Global warming has become one of the most serious issues in the world. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem.

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Introduction
Nowadays, global warming has been one of the biggest problem world wide.
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, I contend that global warming is
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caused mainly
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due to
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by
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 problems
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 as burning fossil fuels and deforestation.
Body paragraph 1
First of all,
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cause
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 of
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 climate change is the combustion of fuels. Using oil,
coals
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coal
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, and natural
gases
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gas
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,
carbon
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dioxide
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 is being
emmited
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emitted
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cause
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causes
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 serious issues to the environment.
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 human beings produce
carbon
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dioxide
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 when breathing, the
carbon
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dioxide
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 level increases
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because
 of the lack of
oxygen
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 that
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 with
carbon
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dioxide
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.
Carbon
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dioxide
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 traps heat in the
atmospher
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atmosphere
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cause
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causes
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 the globe to warm up.
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,
carbon
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dioxide
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 produced by the use of chemicals is the biggest
cause
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 of the issue.
Body paragraph 2
Second of all, deforestation is
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 serious reason
of
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 the global temperature rise, as
greenary
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greenery
 plays a role in reducing
carbon
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dioxide
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 by
spreading around
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oxygen
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.
Oxygen
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 enables the heat in the air to be released, which
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 cool down the
earth
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.
According to
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 a source, the time period when more forests existed had a lower temperature
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 the planet. It is notable that the
destructions
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 of forests around the world is escalating the temperature rise.
Conclusion
In
conculsion
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conclusion
, I believe that the most significant reasons for global warming are the
emmition
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emission
 of
carbon
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dioxide
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 caused by combustion of fossil fuels, and the destruction of forests that causes the decline in
oxygen
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. These situations are unablingt he heat in the atmospher to escape
in
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into
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 space, which has been the most serious issue in the world.

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task response
Answer both parts of the question. You explain the reasons, but you do not give ways to solve the problem. Add a full main paragraph about actions by governments, companies, and people.
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Make your ideas more exact. For example, say that governments can use more clean power, protect forests, and make rules to cut air pollution.
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Check facts carefully. People breathing is not a main reason for global warming. Focus on fuel use in cars, planes, power plants, and factories.
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Use clear examples. For instance, explain how public transport can cut car use, or how planting trees can take in carbon dioxide.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main paragraphs, and an end. However, the main plan does not fully match the question because there is no paragraph on solutions.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each paragraph. Start with a topic sentence, explain it, then give one short example or result.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a natural way. Try: 'One main reason is...', 'Another reason is...', 'To deal with this...', and 'As a result...'.
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Avoid repeating 'carbon dioxide' many times in the same part. You can use 'this gas' after you name it once.
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Make the end short and complete. It should sum up both the causes and the ways to solve the problem.
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You give two important causes: burning fossil fuels and cutting down forests.
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You explain the key link between carbon dioxide and heat in the air.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Words such as 'First of all', 'Second of all', and 'In conclusion' help the reader follow your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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