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the chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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the chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows changes in the number of incidents involving
burglary
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, car theft, and robbery which were committed in New Port city centre between 2003 and 2012
Overall
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,
burglary
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 was
initially
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 the most common type of crime, but its figure declined considerably over the period.
In contrast
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, car theft fluctuated significantly and became the most prevalent crime towards the end of the period. Robbery remained the least common offence throughout the ten years. In 2003, there were about 3,400
cases
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 of
burglary
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.
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 number increased to around 3,700 in 2004, which was the highest figure for
burglary
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. After that, it fell steadily and reached about 1,300
cases
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 in 2008.
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 it changed slightly and stopped at around 1,400 in 2012. Car theft started at around 2,700
cases
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 in 2003 and rose slightly to 2008 in 2004.
However
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, the figure fell to around 2,100 in 2006. After that, it increased and reached about 2,600 in 2010.
Finally
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, it decreased to approximately 2,400 in 2012. Robbery had the lowest figures. It rose from about 700
cases
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 in 2003 to 850 in 2005.
Then
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 it fell to around 500 in 2008. After
that
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that,
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 the number increased slightly and ended up with 700
cases
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 in 2012.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words burglary, cases with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • instances of crime
  • significant decline
  • noticeable change
  • fluctuating trend
  • relatively stable
  • minor fluctuations
  • dramatic reduction
  • converged towards
  • crime rate
  • time frame
  • notable trajectory
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