In the future all cars, buses, and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vechile will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Introduction
Technology will change almost every aspect of life in future. In future, all
vehicles
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including
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cars, buses, and
trucks
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trucks,
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will be
drived
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automatically
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humans will be only passengers in these
vehicles
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. I believe it would be
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beneficial
to have
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driverless
vehicles
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but
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some disadvantages will be there too.
Body paragraph 1
Driveless
vehicles
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will provide a number of advantages over
vehicles
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with drivers. There will be
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road accidents if
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will be drive
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with technology. Sensors in
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will be more responsive
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critical situations on roads than human beings.
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, technology is less prone to
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mistakes than humans.
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, traffic congestion will be lower, as these cars would maintain a steady speed and safe distances.
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would help flow traffic smoothly.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, I think there will be some problems with
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driverless
cars. If there
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a technical issue
encounter
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while
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driving which may lead to a major accident or
mishappen
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mishap
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would be a problem of passenger safety
too
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.
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, many people who work as drivers will
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lose
their jobs and will face financial hardships.
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, individuals will
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lose
their work
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it will make them less progressive.
Conclusion
To conclude
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this
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essay, I will say that driverless
vehicles
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have benefits
but
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its
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their
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drawbacks should not be ignored. These
vehicles
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would be expensive to buy and repair
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would not be
afford
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affordable
by everyone.

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task response
Give a clear answer in the first paragraph: say if the good points are greater than the bad points. Your essay says both sides have points, but it does not clearly compare them.
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Develop each main idea more. Explain why fewer crashes and less traffic would be important, and explain how a system problem could cause harm.
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Use real and clear examples. The example about people losing work repeats the main point. You could name bus drivers, taxi drivers, or truck drivers and say what may happen to them.
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Keep all main points in the body paragraphs. The last paragraph adds cost and repair, but this point was not explained before. Move it to a body paragraph or remove it.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear order: introduction, good points, bad points, and ending. Keep this four-part shape.
coherence and cohesion
Make the link between sentences clearer. For example, write: “As a result, traffic may move more smoothly.” This shows how safe distance can reduce traffic.
coherence and cohesion
Use the same word form and spelling each time. Choose “driverless vehicles” and use it throughout, rather than changing between “driveless cars” and other forms.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid long “if” forms that make meaning hard to follow. For example, write: “If a technical problem happens while a vehicle is moving, it could cause a serious crash.”
task response
You discuss both the good and bad sides of driverless vehicles, including safety, traffic, system problems, and jobs.
coherence and cohesion
Each body paragraph has one main focus, so the reader can follow your ideas easily.
coherence and cohesion
You use useful linking words such as “Additionally”, “On the other hand”, “Moreover”, and “To conclude”.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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