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The table and the chart below provide a breakdown of the total expenditure and the average amount of money spent by students per week while studying abroad in four countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table and the chart below provide a breakdown of the total expenditure and the average amount of money spent by students per week while studying abroad in four countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table and
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 show information about different expense categories and the average money spent in 4
countries
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 when students studied abroad.
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,
countries
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 A and
B
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 accounted for the highest expenditure,
while
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 the lowest expenditure was recorded in
country
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 D. Living
costs
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 were the highest among expense categories in
countries
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 A,
B
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 and
C
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, but Tuition
costs
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 were higher than
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costs
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 in
country
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 D.
Spendings
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Country
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 A was $875, making it the number one in terms of expenditures.
Country
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B
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, responsible for $735, was followed by
country
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C
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 with $ 540.
Country
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 D had the lowest figures with only $435. Living
costs
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 were $430, $350, $275 and $225 in
countries
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 A,
B
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,
C
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 and D
respectively
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. Tuition
costs
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 were the second highest expenditure category in
countries
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 A,
B
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 and
C
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with
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 $358, $320, $250,
although
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 being the highest in
country
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 D at $235. Accommodation
costs
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 were recorded as $220 in
country
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 A, before rising to $280 in
country
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B
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and
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it dropped
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 to $240 in
country
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C
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, and $200 in
country
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 D
respectively
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, b, country, costs, c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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