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The graph below shows the percentage of households with access to the internet in three different countries between 2010 and 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below shows the percentage of households with access to the internet in three different countries between 2010 and 2024. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the number of households connected to the internet in three
countries
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 differing by
hight
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height
 of the average income, between the years 2010 and 2024. The high-income
country
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 continuously had the highest
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percentages
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percentage
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 of internet access,
while
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 the low-income
country
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 showed the lowest percentage of connected households in each year. All
countries
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 saw a linear increase in the percentage of internet connections, with high-income
countries
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 and medium-income
countries
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 accounting for the lowest and the highest rise, respectively.
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 the
country
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 with the
overall
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 highest income experienced the same rising trend as the others, the changes were not as pronounced. From 72% in 2010 to 96% in 2024, the rate of growth slowly tempered off from 9% plus in 2014 to only 2% increase between 2022 and 2024.
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, the other
countries
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 showed smaller
percentages
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overall
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, but a higher rate of growth between the years recorded. The lowest
percentages
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 were recorded in the low-income
country
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, measuring between 8% in 2010 and 51% in 2024. The
percentages
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 in the medium-income category sat between 35% and 84%, from the beginning of the evaluated period until its end. The rates of growth fluctuated between 6% in the low-income
country
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 between 2010 and 2014, and 15% in the same
country
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 between 2018 and 2022. These rates are
overall
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 higher than those of the higher-paid
country
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, country, percentages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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