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The bar chart shows the amount of energy generated by wind in four countries from 1985 to 2000.

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The bar chart shows the amount of energy generated by wind in four countries from 1985 to 2000.
The bar chart illustrates the quantity of
energy
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 produced by wind in four different countries: India, Denmark, Germany and the United States, over the 25
mentioned years
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years mentioned
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. ​
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, the most notable detail is that these three countries - India, Denmark and Germany saw a significant increase in
energy
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 production,
while
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 there was a gradual fluctuation in the figure for the United States over the period shown. ​
It is clear that
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 the amount of
energy
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 generated by wind experienced a considerable increase from 200 megawatts to 1200 megawatts between 1985 and 2000 in India. Meanwhile, the figure for Germany witnessed a slight growth from 400
megawatt
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 to almost 900
megawatt
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 by the end of the period. ​It can be clearly seen that the
energy
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 production by wind in Denmark registered a dramatic rise from its initial 210
megawatt
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 to approximately 1600
megawatt
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 by reaching its peak in 2000. Notably, the United States was a leader for over 25 years period;
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, it saw a slight fall to 1300
megawatt
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 from 1650
megawatt
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 in 1990.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, megawatt with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wind energy generation
  • megawatts (MW)
  • renewable energy
  • energy production
  • growth trend
  • decline
  • technological advancements
  • government policies
  • historical data
  • relative contribution
  • energy mix
  • comparison
  • renewable resources
  • sustainability
  • capacity
  • installations
  • annual production
  • percent increase/decrease
  • between 1985 and 2000
  • notable changes
  • country-specific trends
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