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The chart below shows the results of a European surveyinto young people's expectations for change in five different areas of life in the next 20 years. They were asked if they thought things would impove or get worse.

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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of European
yong
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young
people
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 who expect improvements or declines in five areas of life over the next 20
yearsOverall
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,
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Quality
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the quality
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 of
air
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 in cities was the most common
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 get worse ,
whereas
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 communication between
people
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 was the least common.
In the
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It
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 will improve
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communication
 between
people
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,
while
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Quality
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the quality
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 of
air
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 in cities
led
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leads
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 among.Regarding will improve,
communicaton
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communication
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 accounted for the largest proportion, at 54%, followed by
quality
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 of food at 49%. health represented 42%,
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quality
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 of
air
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 in cities had the smallest share, at only 23%.In terms of
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 worse, the number of
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 taking
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quality
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the quality
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 of
air
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 was approximately 70%, followed by
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quality
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the quality
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 of water at 60%.
By contrast
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, communication between
people
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 was the most unpopular
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, among
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among get
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getting
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 worse, at 46%

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, quality, air with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "improve" was used 2 times.
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