Your friend is about to move into a new house. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter offer to help him/her to move explain how exactly you can help ask him/her some questions about the new house

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Dear Ali, I’m writing to let you know that I’d be happy to lend a hand with moving your furniture into your new home. I’m available between September 25 and September 30, from 8 a.m. to 4 p.m., so just let me know which day would be most convenient for you. I can bring my van, which is quite spacious and would be ideal for transporting smaller pieces of furniture and your books. As I recently moved house myself, I
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have plenty of boxes that you could use for packing your belongings.
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, I can contact a friend who owns a truck, which would be suitable for transporting larger items
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as your fridge, oven and sofa. I’d
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love to hear more about your new home. Where is it located, and how many rooms does it have? What is the neighbourhood like? Are there any useful amenities nearby,
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as supermarkets, banks and healthcare centres?
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, is it easy to get around by public transport? I hope I can make your move a little easier. Let me know which day works best for you. Take care, Mohammadreza

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task response
You answer all parts of the task very well. To make the letter feel even more warm, add one short line about how happy you are for your friend.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are in a clear order: help, ways to help, then questions. Keep using clear paragraph breaks like this.
coherence and cohesion
The opening and ending fit a friendly letter well. You could use your friend’s name in the first line to make it more personal.
task response
You clearly offer help, say what help you can give, and ask useful questions about the new house.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph has one main job, and the letter is easy to read from start to end.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are friendly and fit the letter well.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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