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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem? Give reasons for you

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Introduction
Plastic
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 material has a harmful effect on the environment. It can be damaging to both wild and marine
animals
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.
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,
this
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 could be tackled by governments
inforcing
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enforcing
 strict regulations on companies, and raising people's awareness regarding our environment.
Body paragraph 1
Plastic
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waste
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 can have detrimental effects on
animals
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 living on land and in the sea.
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 is owing to the fact that
animals
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 might mistake
plastic
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waste
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 for food, as
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 could be life-threatening and may even
causes
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cause
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 death.
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, sea turtles may swallow
plastic
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 bags
mistaking
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 them for jellyfish.
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,
animals
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 on land can eat
plastic
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waste
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while
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 searching for food.
Body paragraph 2
Luckiley
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Luckily
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this
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 issue can be tackled by governments enforcing rules on restaurants,factories and companies that are using
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 material regularly, and
motivate
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motivating
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 people regarding the harmful effects of
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 material on our planet. Public authorities should set rules aiming to reduce
the
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apply
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waste
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, and companies should comply with these rules to avoid penalties.
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, all used
plastic
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 material should be disposed
in
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a
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special recycling containers, reducing the
waste
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 thrown in regular
waste
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 containers.
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, there should be educational seminars for people working in different sectors, as
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 could help raise
the
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awareness regarding
plastic
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waste
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 effects.
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for
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 example, employees in supermarkets can attend workshops to reduce
plastic
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 consumption and using environmently alternatives.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
plastic
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 materials
is
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are
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 bad for the environment. Fortunately, measures can be taken by individuals and authorities to help alleviate
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 problem.

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task response
You answer both parts of the question. To make the answer stronger, add more damage from plastic, such as dirty land and water, harm to fish and birds, and blocked drains.
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Your ideas about rules and public learning are clear. Also explain what people can do at home, for example, use cloth bags, refill bottles, and sort waste for reuse.
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Some examples are useful, especially the turtle and jellyfish example. Add one clear example of a person changing daily habits to make the second part more complete.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear start, two main body parts, and an ending. Keep this plan, but make the second body part clearer by writing one paragraph about government action and one about individual action.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words carefully. Words such as “For example”, “Also”, “As a result”, and “In addition” can show how each idea connects.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are hard to follow because of word form or grammar problems. Check singular and plural forms, such as “plastic materials are”, and use full stops and capital letters after each sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating “this material” many times. Use “plastic”, “plastic waste”, or “it” when the meaning is clear.
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You clearly explain that animals may eat plastic by mistake, and the sea turtle example is relevant and easy to understand.
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You give practical actions, including rules for businesses, recycling, and public learning.
coherence and cohesion
Your main ideas are in a logical order: damage first, then ways to reduce the problem.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion both stay focused on the main topic.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plastic pollution
  • ecosystems
  • wildlife
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • air pollution
  • strict regulations
  • plastic consumption
  • eco-friendly alternatives
  • sustainable packaging
  • recycling facilities
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