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Films were produced by big companies in the past, but today people are able to make a film. Do you think this trend is positive or negative?

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Introduction
In today’s world, some people are able to make
movies
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 that can surpass the
movies
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 which are made by the big
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. In
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 I will examine whether
this
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 trend is positive or negative thoroughly, and I will give my perspective on
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 opinion.
Body paragraph 1
Film-making
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Filmmaking
 is
one
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 of the most complicated industries currently. Big
companies
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 compete with each other to make more money in box office.
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 like Paramount
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 and
Netflix
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Netflix,
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 there are
also
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 some individuals who can create masterpiece
movies
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.
One
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 of the most recent
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 is Curry Baker, who directed
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movie
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a movie
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 called «Obsession» with a very small budget, which was considered to be
one
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 of the best
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movie
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movies
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 of 2026.
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, it is
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easier to create
movies
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 with today’s tools and technologies. Some amateurs create
movies
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 using artificial intelligence clips
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, or
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 they can record
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a full
movie
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 with their phone’s camera. Nowadays, they do not have to purchase
professional
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a professional
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 camera
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 or
to
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pay millions of dollars to
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well-known
 actors to make a good film. All the individuals need is passion and their phones.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, big
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 are still dominating
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the film industry. Big film studios are investing hundreds of millions in blockbuster
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, which
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 bring greater profit.
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,
companies
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such
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 as Walt Disney and Warner Bros.
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 own
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 franchises like Harry Potter and Marvel
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, which ensure fame and profit for decades.
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 numerous famous directors cooperate with big
companies
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 to make their
movies
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 budget significantly higher, there are artists who try to create their
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by
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 their own, and from my point of
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 it is a positive effect for the industry.
Conclusion
In conclusion, people creating
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 on their own is a positive trend.
Although
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 films created by big
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 are dominating the market, films created by individuals can
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 gain popularity and love from the audience. Sometimes,
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movie
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a movie
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 created by
unknown
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an unknown
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 director with
low
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a low
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 budget can be considered a better
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 than
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one
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 which was created by a giant studio with millions of dollars.

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task response
State your view more clearly at the end of the first paragraph. Say that this is a positive change and give two main reasons.
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Develop each main idea further. For example, explain how low-cost tools help new people tell new stories, and why this is good for viewers.
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Be careful with examples that may not be real or known. The example of Curry Baker and Obsession does not add much because it is not explained. A general example about phone cameras or online film sites would be safer.
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The second body paragraph mostly explains why big studios are strong. Link this more closely to the question by showing why small film makers are still good for the film world.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two body paragraphs, and an ending. Keep this shape, but make the purpose of each body paragraph clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple links to show the change between ideas: For example, use 'First', 'Also', 'However', and 'As a result'. Do not rely too much on 'Moreover' and 'Furthermore'.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are too long and hold several ideas. Split them into shorter sentences so the reader can follow your point more easily.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating 'big companies', 'movies', and 'create' many times. Use simple changes such as 'large studios', 'films', 'make', and 'independent film makers'.
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You answer the question and give a clear final view that the change is positive.
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You include useful ideas about new tools, phone cameras, and the high cost of studio films.
coherence and cohesion
The order of ideas is easy to follow: small film makers first, large studios next, then your final view.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion returns to the main question and sums up your opinion.
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