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The graph below shows the percentage of money spent on advertising in five types of media in France from 2010 and projected spending to 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below shows the percentage of money spent on advertising in five types of media in France from 2010 and projected spending to 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph provides key information on how the money changed in France between 2010 and 2040.
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 television, newspaper, magazine, radio and internet.
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, both views have significant points.
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 the highest point, the internet
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 the highest percentage.
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 the lowest points, the magazine
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 the lowest percentage.
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, both views have significant rates. On the one hand, in terms of the highest
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 the main report,
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, it has the lowest number at almost 4%.
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, in terms of the lowest
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 the given information,
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 and radio are the lowest part in all periods at about 2%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, however, moreover, thus".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words level with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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