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The graph below shows the percentage of money spent on advertising in five types of media in France from 2010 and projected spending to 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below shows the percentage of money spent on advertising in five types of media in France from 2010 and projected spending to 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph provides key information on how the money changed.
This
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 television, newspaper, magazine, radio and internet. The units are shown in percentages.
This
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 assay will provide key information to explore the topic.
Overall
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,
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 the main changes, the internet has the highest percentage.
However
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, the magazine has the lowest percentage.
Thus
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, both views have significant rates. On the one hand, in terms of the highest
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, in terms of the primary changes,
according to
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 the main report,
according to
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 the given data, the internet has the highest number at almost 49%.
However
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, the lowest number
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 almost 4%.
In addition
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, the
level
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 changed significantly.
On the other hand
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, in terms of the lowest
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,
according to
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 the main report,
according to
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 the given information,
according to
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 the secondary changes, the radio is the lowest part in all periods at about 2%.
Moreover
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, the
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 changed dramatically.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words level with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provides" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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