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The charts below show the percentage of food and goods bought from supermarkets in European countries in 1998 and 2008.

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The charts below show the percentage of food and goods bought from supermarkets in European countries in 1998 and 2008.
The given bar charts compare the proportion of
food
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 and
goods
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 bought from supermarkets in a specific EU
nations
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nation
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 in two years (1998 and 2008).
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 all figures showed an upward trajectory throughout the period. It is
also
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 evident that
food
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that've
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that's
 been bought in supermarkets had the highest percentage in
country
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B
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 in the initial year,
whereas
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goods
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 that
consumed
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were consumed
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 by
country
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 A witnessed the most dramatic growth over the given years. In detail, the share of
food
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 in
country
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 A accounted for 10% by 1998, compared with less than 5% for
goods
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 bought in the same
country
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.
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, both of these figures showed an increasing trend
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 the proportion of
food
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 increased moderately to 35% by the end of the period.
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,
goods
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 experienced the most significant rise to approximately 40% by 2008.
Following
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this
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 trend, the remaining countries were
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country
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B
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 and
country
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 C, both of which showed an increase. Meanwhile, the proportion of
food
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 bought in supermarkets in
country
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B
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 rose from 23% to 27% by 2008.
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,
goods
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 in
country
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B
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 grew slightly from 29% to 31% by the end of the timeframe.
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,
goods
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 bought in
country
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 C stood at 1% in 1998, before rising by 13 percentage points, to 14% by over a 10-year period,
while
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food
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 climbed steadily from 6% to 8% by the end of the timescale.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, goods, country, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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