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The table gives information on the expenditure rate of the government on education and training and participation rate of 18-24-year-olds in five nationas in 2002.

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The table gives information on the expenditure rate of the government on education and training and participation rate of 18-24-year-olds in five nationas in 2002.
The provided table compares the
percentage
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 of expenses
rate
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 of the government on formation and training
and
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participation
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 ratio of those aged 18-24 year-old's in five different countries in 2002.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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Slovenia
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 had the highest proportion in terms of expenditure,
while
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 Poland represented the largest share in
participation
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. It is
also
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 evident that Romania stood apart from others with the lowest fraction in
participation
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. In detail, the share of Poland in terms of expenditure accounted for 5% in 2002, compared with 9% for
Czech
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 Republic.
However
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, there was a slight difference of 3
percentage
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 points between Romania and Hungary in expenses
rate
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, at 10% and 13%, respectively.
Moreover
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, the figure for
Slovenia
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 represented the highest
percentage
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 at 25% in
expenditure
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the expenditure
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 ratio.
Following
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this
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 trend, in the
participation
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rate
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rate,
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 five nations had an average
fractions
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fraction
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. Meanwhile, Romania stood at 23%
making
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 it the lowest among the others,
while
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Czech
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the Czech
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 Republic accounted for 27% in 2002.
Likewise
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, there was a noticeable difference of 4
percentage
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 points between Poland and
Slovenia
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 in
participation
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rate
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, at 44% and 40%, respectively.
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,
the figure
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Hungary had a much lower proportion
as
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than
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Slovenia
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 at 34% in
participation
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, rate, participation, slovenia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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