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The charts below illustrate the percentage of time that male and female students spend on five different types of websites. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The charts below illustrate the percentage of time that male and female students spend on five different types of websites. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The chart illustrates information about the proportion of
time
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 spent by students
according to
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 their gender on different types of
websites
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.
Overall
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, for male
students
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students,
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 sport was the highest
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websites
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website
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,
whereas
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 shopping was the lowest. Regarding
to
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apply
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the second
group
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group,
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study was the largest
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the largest time was
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time
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 spent on
websites
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,
while
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 sport and other
websites
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 were the lowest. As the graph shows, for men
students
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students,
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 sports
websites
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 accounted for the highest percentage of
time
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 with 35%, followed by study with 30%, which is the second largest for
this
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 group of people.
Additionally
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, news represented 20%, and other
websites
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 accounted for 10%,
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and finally
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finally
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finally,
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 the lowest
time
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was spend by them
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spent
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 was around 5% for shopping.
On the other hand
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, for female pupils the largest percentage was for study with 45%,
then
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 shopping the second
gratest
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greatest
 rate made up 20%. Regarding the lowest amount of
time
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, which
were
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was
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 for news at 15%, sport with 10%, and other
websites
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 accounted for 10% as well.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, websites with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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