IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

Some people argue that the primary purpose of natural resources, such as forests and rivers, is to support human development and economic growth. Others believe that it is essential to protect the natural environment and its wildlife, even if it restricts human activity and progress.

5.0 / 9
Band scoreView breakdown ↓
✍️ Want to check your own essay?Write on this topic →
Introduction
In today's world,
people
Use synonyms
 are divided
in to
Correct your spelling
into
 two halves.
whereas
Linking Words
 the first half believes that the main purpose of natural resources is to support human development and economic growth.
However
Linking Words
, the other half thinks that it is crucial to protect the natural
environment
Use synonyms
 even if it restricts human activity and progress. Taking both perspectives into
count
Check wording
account
show examples
, I firmly believe
,
Punctuation problem
apply
show examples
 that both views are right, and natural resources should be used wisely.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
Linking Words
 with, the first point of view explains how natural resources
hold
Verb problem
play
show examples
 a big role in human development and economic growth. Everything that you see in your daily life
,
Punctuation problem
apply
show examples
 is provided by dear
nature
Use synonyms
, starting from the pen that you
use
Use synonyms
 to write, till the house that you live in.
For instance
Linking Words
, forests provide us with wood needed
,
Punctuation problem
apply
show examples
 to build schools, parks, shopping avenues, and much more.
Moreover
Linking Words
, some individuals intend to
use
Use synonyms
 water from rivers for unknown industrial purposes.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
Linking Words
, some
people
Use synonyms
 argue about the importance of protecting the natural
environment
Use synonyms
 and its wildlife.
For example
Linking Words
, constant deforestation and tree cutting
,
Punctuation problem
apply
show examples
 can lead to
lowering
Replace the word
lower
 oxygen levels on
earth
Capitalize the proper name
Earth
show examples
, and
that is
Linking Words
 because trees and plants are the main providers of oxygen
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
 our planet. If
nature
Use synonyms
 is harmed,
people
Use synonyms
 can face really harmful and difficult circumstances. One example is climate change. In my opinion. I believe that
people
Use synonyms
 should
use
Use synonyms
nature
Use synonyms
wisley
Correct your spelling
wisely
 and protect it from harmful actions.
People
Use synonyms
 should
also
Linking Words
 try more authentic and efficient ways to save the
environment
Use synonyms
, like reducing the usage of electricity, using solar energy and recycling.
Conclusion
In conclusion, both points of view argue with good reasons
,
Add a semicolon
;
show examples
however
Linking Words
, it is fundamental for each individual to
use
Use synonyms
nature
Use synonyms
 wisely. I
encourge
Correct your spelling
encourage
 each person to take a step and try to save our
environment
Use synonyms
 by using efficient energy or trying to recycle used appliances.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: